Well that pitch is terrible. I will put a better one up shortly.
The good news is that I’ve decided that only the first few paragraphs of chapter one needs to be rewritten instead of the whole chapter. I’ve moved on in the editing process and I’ll do the rewrite at some point. I have even cut sections out completely, despite my fear that if I prune too aggrssively, there won’t be any story left at all.
Chris Loblaw, Author 